How do you loosen up?
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If I stuck in a stressful situation and want to be relaxed, I tried to think positively by doing meditation. This is the way that I get loosen up myself. I have heard of the benefits of doing meditation for several times , however, I haven\'t really tried before. One day, I saw one of the popular Korean singers talking about the advantages of meditation on Youtube video. He said using application called \'Calm\' leads him to do meditation easily whenever he wants. After watching it, I also downloaded the app and tried doing it. It was a lot more helpful than I expected. I realized that meditation brings me to a bright side. In other words, If our mind shines, our life shines. I can unwind my bad feelings through meditation.
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How do you loosen up?If I stuck in a stressful situation and want to be relaxed, I tried to think positively by doing meditation.
>>If I get stuck in a stressful situation and I want to relax, I will try to think positively by meditating.
This is the way that I get loosen up myself.
>>This is the way I usually loosen up.
or>>This is the way I usually loosen myself up.
I have heard of the benefits of doing meditation for several times , however, I haven\'t really tried before.
>>I have heard of the benefits of doing meditations for several times , however, I haven\'t really tried it before.
One day, I saw one of the popular Korean singers talking about the advantages of meditation on Youtube video.
>>One day, I saw one of the popular Korean singers talking about the advantages of meditation on a YouTube video.
or>>One day, I watched a YouTube video of one of the popular Korean singers talking about the advantages of meditation.
He said using application called \'Calm\' leads him to do meditation easily whenever he wants.
>>He said that using a method called \'Calm\' led him to have meditations very easily whenever he wants.
After watching it, I also downloaded the app and tried doing it.
>>After watching this, I also downloaded the app and tried doing it.
It was a lot more helpful than I expected.
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or>>It was indeed very helpful more than I expected.
I realized that meditation brings me to a bright side.
CORRECT!
or>>I realized that meditation can transform me to a bright place.
In other words, If our mind shines, our life shines.
>>In other words, If our mind is enlightened, our life will shine as well.
I can unwind my bad feelings through meditation.
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or>>I can unleash my bad feelings by meditating.
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