How do you see yourself 5 years from now? Share your thoughts in a few sentences.
학생이 쓴 원문
I would finish my residency after 5 years from now. I hope that I will have enough capability and self-confidence as a dermatologist. As I have done before as a student, I would try hard to study the dermatology and to acquire some skills as a dermatologist, such as laser therapy or dressing. In addition, I would work in the hospital as a fellow, and might get a doctor\\\'s degree. I would also progress my own academic research. Besides, I hope to have stronger mind, relative to what I have now after 5 years. Through stronger mind, I might be able to keep inner peace stably, even when facing any difficulties in my work as a profession or when dealing with irritable patients. Nowadays, I practice to keep inner peace everyday, so I think I might be good at mind-controlling after 5 years, which helps me work as a doctor without losing my ego even when there are too many works.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
Practicing restrain and self control is so important specially when your work demands a lot of energy and patience. As a future dermatologist, I am certain that you can execute your job well because you have the intelligence and the capacity to understand medical situations well.
So, take a day at a time and master well your skills. See you tonight!
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
As I have done before as a student, I would try hard to study the dermatology and to acquire some skills as a dermatologist, such as laser therapy or dressing.
>> As I have done before as a student, I will try hard to study dermatology and acquire some skills as a dermatologist such as laser therapy or dressing.
In addition, I would work in the hospital as a fellow, and might get a doctor\\\'s degree. I would also progress my own academic research.
>> Correct!
Besides, I hope to have stronger mind, relative to what I have now after 5 years.
>> Besides, I hope to have a stronger mind, relative to what I have now after 5 years.
Through stronger mind, I might be able to keep inner peace stably, even when facing any difficulties in my work as a profession or when dealing with irritable patients.
>> Through a stronger mind, I might be able to keep my inner peace stably, even when facing any difficulties in my work as a professional or when dealing with irritable patients.
Nowadays, I practice to keep inner peace everyday, so I think I might be good at mind-controlling after 5 years, which helps me work as a doctor without losing my ego even when there are too many works.
>> Correct!
Or: ... too much work...
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