How do you think can parents encourage their kids to do physical activities?
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Parents have to be wise when they encourage their kids to do physical activities because Kids want to play. They don\'t want to do boring physical activities although they are sure to helpl build their bodies.
There are many interesting programs customized for helping kids grow physically in Korea. My kids also participate in some programs run by the nearby gym. They like them that they are happy to go to the gym every day. I believe this program helps kids develop themselves mentally as well as physically, as the old saying goes, \'A sound mind in a sound body\'
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- Debbie
Parents have to be wise when they encourage their kids to do physical activities because Kids want to play.
>> Parents have to be wise when they are encouraging their kids to do physical activities because kids just want to play.
They don\'t want to do boring physical activities although they are sure to helpl build their bodies.
>> They don\'t want to do boring physical activities, although they can help build the children\'s bodies.
There are many interesting programs customized for helping kids grow physically in Korea.
>> There are many interesting programs customized to help kids grow physically in Korea.
My kids also participate in some programs run by the nearby gym.
>> This is a good sentence.
They like them that they are happy to go to the gym every day.
>> They seem happy when they go to the gym every day.
I believe this program helps kids develop themselves mentally as well as physically, as the old saying goes, \'A sound mind in a sound body\'
>> I believe this program helps kids develop themselves mentally as well as physically. As the old saying goes, \"A sound mind in a sound body.\"
- Debbie
Parents have to be wise when they encourage their kids to do physical activities because Kids want to play.
>> Parents have to be wise when they are encouraging their kids to do physical activities because kids just want to play.
They don\'t want to do boring physical activities although they are sure to helpl build their bodies.
>> They don\'t want to do boring physical activities, although they can help build the children\'s bodies.
There are many interesting programs customized for helping kids grow physically in Korea.
>> There are many interesting programs customized to help kids grow physically in Korea.
My kids also participate in some programs run by the nearby gym.
>> This is a good sentence.
They like them that they are happy to go to the gym every day.
>> They seem happy when they go to the gym every day.
I believe this program helps kids develop themselves mentally as well as physically, as the old saying goes, \'A sound mind in a sound body\'
>> I believe this program helps kids develop themselves mentally as well as physically. As the old saying goes, \"A sound mind in a sound body.\"
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