How do you think can we solve traffic problems there in South Korea?
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I think we have to spread people to other cities because too many citizens are living in Seoul.
Because of these reason, there are too my citizens in the around of Seoul and in Seoul.
So around Seoul, we can easily find different kinds of traffic problems.
But around the countrysides, we can easily experience that there are too less entertainment facilities.
Because of these reasons, I think the South Korean government have to spread the people to other cities.
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Because of these reason, there are too my citizens in the around of Seoul and in Seoul.
So around Seoul, we can easily find different kinds of traffic problems.
But around the countrysides, we can easily experience that there are too less entertainment facilities.
That\'s true. There are traffic jams because of too much cars on the road.
I think we have to spread people to other cities because too many citizens are living in Seoul.
>> I think we have to spread the number of people to other cities because there are too many citizens in Soul.
Because of these reason, there are too my citizens in the around of Seoul and in Seoul.
>> Because of this, Seoul is overpopulated.
So around Seoul, we can easily find different kinds of traffic problems.
>> This causes a lot of traffic jams in the city.
But around the countrysides, we can easily experience that there are too less entertainment facilities.
>> But when we go to country sides, we can go to different facilities much easier.
Because of these reasons, I think the South Korean government have to spread the people to other cities.
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