How do you think should wars be stopped and prevented?
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I think that wars should be prevented with the way how all countries become strong because some countries attack other countries which are weaker than them. So, I think that if all countries become strong, any country will not be easy to attack other country. Also, wars should be stopped with the way how other countries have to support countries which be attacked by stronger countries but, I hope that any war don\'t be broken out.
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Hi Kimberly!
Wars are never good in any forms. All countries should form unity. Just like in people, we should not bully the ones that are weaker.
I think that wars should be prevented with the way how all countries become strong because some countries attack other countries which are weaker than them.
>> CORRECT
So, I think that if all countries become strong, any country will not be easy to attack other country.
>> So, I think that if all countries become strong, no country would be easy to attack.
Also, wars should be stopped with the way how other countries have to support countries which be attacked by stronger countries but, I hope that any war don\'t be broken out.
>> Also, wars should be stopped with the way how other countries have to support other countries. I hope wars won\'t exist anymore.
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