How do you think should wars be stopped and prevented?
학생이 쓴 원문
First, if we want to stop wars, then, we should try to stop dictatorship.
Dictatorship could make wars because only one person could make the decision about something.
And we also have to prevent wars.
There are a lot of ways to prevent wars, but one of them is education.
We should continue the education about the danger of wars.
I think those ways are the ways that we could stop and prevent wars.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
War is not good in any forms. Victims are the ones mostly affected, not the leaders. These are good ways to stop and prevent them. :)
First, if we want to stop wars, then, we should try to stop dictatorship.\\
>> First, if we want to stop wars, we should try to stop dictatorship
Dictatorship could make wars because only one person could make the decision about something.
>> Dictatorship could make wars because only one person could make decisions for the country.
And we also have to prevent wars.
>> Also, we have to prevent wars.
There are a lot of ways to prevent wars, but one of them is education.
>> CORRECT
We should continue the education about the danger of wars.
>> We should continue educating people about the dangers of wars.
I think those ways are the ways that we could stop and prevent wars.
>> I think those are the ways that could help stop or prevent wars.
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