How do you think technology,has changed the way we interact with people?
학생이 쓴 원문
Technology contribute to globalize countries over the world.
People share imformation rapidly and use thire work,life.
We keep in touch other people in any places ,so feel much closer.
I talk with my sons who are in aboard watching monitor.
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Good evening Ms. [이름] [이름]. thanks for sharing your thoughts about this topic.
T. Irene
Technology contribute to globalize countries over the world.
>>> Technology contributes to globalizing many countries over the world.
People share imformation rapidly and use thire work,life.
People share imformation rapidly and use thire work,life.
>>> People share information instantly and use it in their work and daily life.
We keep in touch other people in any places ,so feel much closer.
We keep in touch other people in any places ,so feel much closer.
>>> We keep in touch with other people in different places so we feel much closer.
I talk with my sons who are in aboard watching monitor.
I talk with my sons who are in aboard watching monitor.
>>> I talk with my sons, who are aboard, using internet applications on the phone.
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