How do you think you will change in the future?

2019-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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If I have a chance to work in another country, I would like to leave Korea and work there. As part of preparation to go abroad for working, I am studying English with Power English. I think that person who prepare something ahead can get a chance. I am sure that I will get a good chance to go out Korea and I am going to have a senior or a higher position than I have now. I don\'t know if it is right that I have to live only for near future. However, I sometimes asked that why I have to prepare my future, if so I can not afford to manage my life in best way. If I didn\'t save money that I will use when I retire from my job, I would not have money for something that I will be excited. Even though the reason I mentioned above, I need to keep studying and saving for my future life. Because I didn\'t, there will be a dark life. Life is too short, but I will make my life beautiful, To make it, I will never stop improving myself.

강사 첨삭

Here\'s something motivational, Sir [이름]!

The perception of future seems like thriving on a regular basis, and it\'s making us anxious about how do we do well in making our life brighter. Believe in yourself, I know you can do it! Keep your head up but your feet on the ground. See you in class!

~Teacher Eunice


If I have a chance to work in another country, I would like to leave Korea and work there.

>>> correct!

As part of preparation to go abroad for working, I am studying English with Power English.

>>> As a part of my preparation to go abroad for working, I am studying English with Power English.

>>> OR: As a part of my preparation for an employment abroad, I am studying English with Power English.

I think that person who prepare something ahead can get a chance.

>>> I think a person who prepares something ahead can get a chance.

I am sure that I will get a good chance to go out Korea and I am going to have a senior or a higher position than I have now.

>>> I am sure that I will get a good chance to go outside Korea, so I might acquire a higher position than I have now.

I don\'t know if it is right that I have to live only for near future.

>>> I don\'t know if it is right that I have to live only for the near future.

However, I sometimes asked that why I have to prepare my future, if so I can not afford to manage my life in best way.
>>>  
However, I sometimes ask why I have to prepare for my future, if so then why I can\'t afford to manage my life in a best way.

If I didn\'t save money that I will use when I retire from my job, I would not have money for something that I will be excited.

>>> If I can\'t save money from my job which will be used for my retirement then I would not have money for something that I will be excited about.

Even though the reason I mentioned above, I need to keep studying and saving for my future life.

>>> The reason why I mentioned above was because I needed to keep studying and saving for my future life.

Because I didn\'t, there will be a dark life.

>>> Because if I don\'t, I wouldn\'t have a bright future.

Life is too short, but I will make my life beautiful, To make it, I will never stop improving myself.

>>> Life is too short, but I will make my life beautiful, and to make it, I will never stop improving myself.

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