How do you usually your great co-workers?

2020-06-09 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

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Dear [Name], Thank you for your kindness lesson. I have a good co-workers. They always helps me. My manager take care of my businesx problems. My colligue give me a idea to make a sales too. I appreciate to my co-worker. I would like to suggest you about my business lesson. I would like to talk to you about lesson1 like a real situation tomorrow. So, if you call to me tomorrow, You say \'hello?\' I will reply \' Good evening. this is [이름] from Werfen Korea I would like ~ You say \' hi Hold on~ Continuous ~ After finish talking, you correct my errors or mistakes and pronounciation. I want to repeat like this talking after lesson. What do you think about my opinion?

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]~ 
It\'s okay to do your suggestion. We will do it like in a real situation. That is how we are going to start our class. See you later in class. 

Here are your corrections:

Dear [Name],

Thank you for your kindness lesson.
>> Thank you for your kindness in teaching the lesson.

I have a good co-workers. 
>> I have good co-workers.

They always helps me. 
>> They always help me.

My manager take care of my businesx problems.
>> My manager takes care of my business problems.

My colligue give me a idea to make a sales too.
>> My colleagues give me ideas to makes sales too.

I appreciate to my co-worker.
>> I appreciate my co-workers.

I would like to suggest you about my business lesson. 
>> I would like to suggest something about my business lesson.

I would like to talk to you about lesson1 like a real situation tomorrow.
>> I would like to do the lesson 1 like in a real situation.

So, if you call to me tomorrow,
You say \'hello?\'
>> So, if you will call me tomorrow, you will say, \"Hello?\".

I will reply \' Good evening. this is [이름] from Werfen Korea I would like ~
You say \' hi Hold on~
Continuous ~
>> My reply will be, \"Good evening. this is [이름] from Werfen Korea I would like ~\" and so on.

After finish talking, you correct my errors or mistakes and pronounciation.
>> After talking, you will correct any errors, mistakes in pronunciation I committed.

I want to repeat like this talking after lesson.
>> I want to repeat it again before we end the lesson.

What do you think about my opinion?
>> CORRECT // but instead of \"opinion\" use \"suggestion\"

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