How do you want to improve the health care system in your country?
학생이 쓴 원문
First, I satisfy Korea health care system.
Expenses of medical is lower than other countries.
Because coverage of health care is huge.
However, I wish improving system more.
In rare disease case such as cancer, it still need huge amount expenses.
강사 첨삭
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>> First, I am satisfied with the Korean healthcare system.
Expenses of medical is lower than other countries. Because coverage of health care is huge.
>> Medical expenses are lower than in many other countries because healthcare coverage is extensive
However, I wish improving system more.
>> However, I hope the system can be improved further.
In rare disease case such as cancer, it still need huge amount expenses.
>> In cases of serious illnesses, such as cancer, patients may still face very high medical expenses.
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