How does pollution affect future generations?
학생이 쓴 원문
Pollution is a big issue in every countries. They have tried to reduce this problem. In this April, I felt these are serious. Because I saw the cherry blossom with snows. That is crazy weather. And This summer is so hot. Every summer is higher temperature than last. If pollutions continues, our life breaks. I felt we should effort to prevent to accelerate this problem. The methods to do this are various. That can start a small thing. I can use echo-bottle in the coffee shops. Many plastic cups is one of the pollution causes. If every people try to effort small things for the earth, the weather may become their original shape.
강사 첨삭
Hi Ji[이름], I really appreciate your homework! I love how you gave a long and detailed response, showing that you truly care about pollution and climate change. You didn’t just write a few sentences. You expressed your personal observations and ideas, which makes your writing heartfelt and engaging. I also admire how you reflect on small actions, like using eco-bottles, and connect them to the bigger picture. That shows real thoughtfulness. Keep writing long responses like this. You’re improving your English and sharing your voice in a meaningful way. I’m really impressed with your effort!
~ T. Lia
Pollution is a big issue in every countries.
>> Pollution is a big issue in every country.
They have tried to reduce this problem.
>> CORRECT
In this April, I felt these are serious.
>> This April, I felt that these problems are serious.
Because I saw the cherry blossom with snows.
>> I saw cherry blossoms with snow, which is unusual.
That is crazy weather.
>> CORRECT or
>> That is one crazy weather.
And This summer is so hot.
>> And this summer is very hot.
Every summer is higher temperature than last.
>> Every summer is hotter than the last.
If pollutions continues, our life breaks.
>> If pollution continues, our lives will be affected.
I felt we should effort to prevent to accelerate this problem.
>> I felt we should make an effort to prevent this problem from getting worse.
The methods to do this are various.
>> There are various methods to do this.
That can start a small thing.
>> It can start with small actions.
I can use echo-bottle in the coffee shops.
>> I can use an eco-bottle in coffee shops.
Many plastic cups is one of the pollution causes.
>> Many plastic cups are one of the causes of pollution.
If every people try to effort small things for the earth, the weather may become their original shape.
>> If everyone makes an effort with small actions for the Earth, the weather may return to its original state.
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