How does social media affect people\'s self-esteem? Share your opinion.
학생이 쓴 원문
I disagree with using a social media.
These days, Many people upload their photo on a social media such as a enjoying vacation at a fancy resorts and restaurant.
However, It\'s manipulated. it\'s not real life. it\'s a bluff.
Some people thought when they watched other\'s photo in a social media, \"I\'m poor\".
So their self-esteem is decreased.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! I think social media does indeed have a huge effect on people and somehow social media is used for showing off. Thank you for sharing your ideas.
~~Teacher Ryka^^
I disagree with using a social media.
>> I disagree with using social media.
These days, Many people upload their photo on a social media such as a enjoying vacation at a fancy resorts and restaurant.
>> These days, many people upload their photos on social media, such as enjoying vacations at fancy resorts and restaurants.
However, It\'s manipulated. it\'s not real life. it\'s a bluff.
>> However, it\'s manipulated. It\'s not real life; it\'s a bluff.
Some people thought when they watched other\'s photo in a social media, \"I\'m poor\".
>> Some people think that when they see others\' photos on social media, they feel \'I\'m poor.\'
So their self-esteem is decreased.
>> As a result, their self-esteem decreases.
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