How does the perspective that obesity is the result of eating too much differ from the view that it
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I have read books about diabetes, the writer said there were significantly less patients with diabetes just few decades ago, at least in Korea.
It was because there were no enough food to eat.
And, usually obese people tend to suffer from diabetes.
Also So I can infer from that, eating too much is still the major reason to the obesity.
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Hi, Ms. [이름]! You\'ve made some logical connections between food availability, obesity, and diabetes. Thank you for your effort.
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I have read books about diabetes, the writer said there were significantly less patients with diabetes just few decades ago, at least in Korea.
>>I have read books about diabetes, and the writers said there were significantly fewer patients with diabetes just a few decades ago, at least in Korea.
It was because there were no enough food to eat.
It was because there were no enough food to eat.
>>It was because there was not enough food to eat.
OR
>> This phenomenon can be attributed to the scarcity of food resources prevalent during that period.
And, usually obese people tend to suffer from diabetes.
And, usually obese people tend to suffer from diabetes.
Correct, or
>>Typically, individuals who are obese are predisposed to developing diabetes
Also So I can infer from that, eating too much is still the major reason to the obesity.
Also So I can infer from that, eating too much is still the major reason to the obesity.
>>So, what I can infer from this is that eating too much is still the major reason for obesity.
OR
>>Hence, the deduction drawn from this is that excessive consumption remains the predominant cause of obesity.
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