How does traveling enrich your life?
학생이 쓴 원문
Traveling enriches my life by refreshing me.
I often felt exhausted with my daily life because of repetitive tasks.
However, traveling abroad encouraged me to experience various activities.
I could also learn different cultures by meeting people and trying traditional food.
I traveled abroad for the first time when I failed to enter the univeristy I wanted.
At that time, I was wondering if I should take an entrance exam again or not.
However, thanks to the trip, I could refresh myself, so I could challenge the test again.
Since that time, I have been traveling every year because it can give me a refreshing time.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
I often felt exhausted with my daily life because of repetitive tasks.
I could also learn different cultures by meeting people and trying traditional food.
However, thanks to the trip, I could refresh myself, so I could challenge the test again.
Since that time, I have been traveling every year because it can give me a refreshing time.
You did a wonderful job expressing how travel impacts your life! I like how you shared a personal story. It made your writing meaningful and heartfelt. Just remember to use words like \"unsure\" instead of \"wondering if I should\" for smoother flow, and watch small grammar details like \"university\" spelling. Keep writing with this kind of passion! You’re improving beautifully!
~Teacher Polly
Traveling enriches my life by refreshing me.
Traveling enriches my life by refreshing me.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Traveling enriches my life by refreshing my mind and body.
I often felt exhausted with my daily life because of repetitive tasks.
>>I often feel exhausted from my daily routine because of repetitive tasks.
However, traveling abroad encouraged me to experience various activities.
>>CORRECT
I could also learn different cultures by meeting people and trying traditional food.
>>I can also learn about different cultures by meeting people and trying traditional foods.
I traveled abroad for the first time when I failed to enter the univeristy I wanted.
>>I traveled abroad for the first time after I failed to enter the university I wanted.
At that time, I was wondering if I should take an entrance exam again or not.
>>CORRECT
OR>>At that time, I was unsure whether I should take the entrance exam again or not.
However, thanks to the trip, I could refresh myself, so I could challenge the test again.
>>Thanks to that trip, I was able to refresh myself and gain the courage to challenge the test again.
Since that time, I have been traveling every year because it can give me a refreshing time.
OR>>Since then, I have made it a habit to travel every year because it gives me the energy I need.
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