How does your country view the LGBT community, and what are your personal insights about them?

2019-12-23 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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This is very sensitive issue to discuss and I can\'t stand any side about. I can understand a little bit about LGBT community. I agree that people must admit their dignity and human right if they don\'t make any social and health problem to others. AIDS is the most serious problem occurred from LGBT groups. As I know, Christians strongly object admitting the request of LGBT groups, because of their belief. I guess most people in Korea don\'t like LGBTs and I have a similar sight. Many countries admit their right and sexual freedom. The other way, few countries strongly prohibit their right. I can under both way and I don\'t know what the best way to solve it is. It\'s controversial issues all around world.

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This is very sensitive issue to discuss and I can\'t stand any side about.

>> This is a very sensitive issue to discuss and I can\'t pick any side.

I can understand a little bit about LGBT community.

>> CORRECT

I agree that people must admit their dignity and human right if they don\'t make any social and health problem to others.

>> I agree that people must admit their dignity and human right as long as they don\'t cause any social and health problem to others.

AIDS is the most serious problem occurred from LGBT groups.

>> AIDS is the most serious problem occurring from LGBT groups.

As I know, Christians strongly object admitting the request of LGBT groups, because of their belief.

>> As I know, Christians strongly object the requests of LGBT groups, because of their belief.
I guess most people in Korea don\'t like LGBTs and I have a similar sight.

>> I guess most people in Korea don\'t like LGBTs and I have a similar insight.

Many countries admit their right and sexual freedom.

>> CORRECT

The other way, few countries strongly prohibit their right.

>> On the other hand, a few countries prohibit their rights.

I can under both way and I don\'t know what the best way to solve it is.

>> I can understand both sides and I don\'t know the best way to solve it.

It\'s controversial issues all around world.

>> It\'s a controversial issue all around the world.

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