How does your country view the LGBT community, and what are your personal insights about them?
학생이 쓴 원문
LGBT comes from an ancient period, that time was veiled, but at 21century it unveils to our sodiety. It is a natural thing, I can recognize it. There are lots of differrent people in the world and we need to admit all sorts of diversities.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ms. [이름]! Thanks for sending in your composition. I appreciate your thoughts on this topic. ^^
Have an awesome day! ^_^
~T.Avery
LGBT comes from an ancient period, that time was veiled, but at 21century it unveils to our sodiety.
>> LGBT comes from an ancient period, that time was veiled. However, in the 21st century, it was unveiled to our society.
It is a natural thing, I can recognize it.
>> CORRECT
OR>> I understand it is a normal occurrence.
There are lots of differrent people in the world and we need to admit all sorts of diversities.
>> CORRECT
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.