How does your government punish people who jeopardize public health?

2020-03-17 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

학생이 쓴 원문

In case of diseases which don’t have medicine, prevention is very important factor for our health. So, China and Italy governments block their city and other countries also request their citizen not to go out if possible. Especially, it is a duty for people who have symptoms like a cough and fever. In my country, pseudo members made situation worse. They lied about some information like their religion, movement and even don’t follow the rule. Because a lot of general people are infected and died, the law about prevention and management of infectious disease was passed last month. According to this law, people who are infected or contact infected people should isolate for 14 days at home. They should also check their condition using app and contact with public servant. If they don’t follow this, they can be imprisoned up to one year or fined about 8150 dollars from next month. Also, it is possible to claim for damages. Therefore, it is good to follow instruction for everyone.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Se [이름]!
~Teacher Lucy

In case of diseases which don’t have medicine, prevention is very important factor for our health. 
>>In case of diseases which don’t have medicine available, prevention is very important factor for our health. 
So, China and Italy governments block their city and other countries also request their citizen not to go out if possible. 
>>CORRECT!
Especially, it is a duty for people who have symptoms like a cough and fever.
>>
Especially, it is a duty for people who have symptoms like cough and fever.
In my country, pseudo members made situation worse. 
>>CORRECT!
They lied about some information like their religion, movement and even don’t follow the rule. 
>>CORRECT!
Because a lot of general people are infected and died, the law about prevention and management of infectious disease was passed last month.
>>
Because a lot of people are infected and died, the law about prevention and management of infectious disease was passed last month.
According to this law, people who are infected or contact infected people should isolate for 14 days at home. 
>>According to this law, people who are infected or contact infected people should isolate their selves for 14 days at home. 
They should also check their condition using app and contact with public servant.
>>CORRECT!
 If they don’t follow this, they can be imprisoned up to one year or fined about 8150 dollars from next month. 
>>CORRECT!
Also, it is possible to claim for damages. 
>>CORRECT!
Therefore, it is good to follow instruction for everyone.
>>Therefore, it is good to follow instructions for everyone.

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