How has modern life changed traditional family roles and relationships?
학생이 쓴 원문
In the past, each family member has own role.
For example, a husband went to work to earn money for their family, and a wife did household work.
However, as careers become important, family bonds tend to weaken in the mordern life.
Even married couples live in different cities and some couples don\'t have babies.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Good job explaining how family roles have changed over time! You provided clear examples and contrasted the past with the present. Just watch verb tenses and word choice, like “has own role → had their own role” and “mordern → modern.” Keep up the thoughtful writing!
~Teacher Polly
In the past, each family member has own role.
>>In the past, each family member had their own role.
For example, a husband went to work to earn money for their family, and a wife did household work.
>>For example, the husband went to work to earn money for the family, while the wife took care of household chores.
However, as careers become important, family bonds tend to weaken in the mordern life.
>>However, as careers have become more important, family bonds tend to weaken in modern life.
Even married couples live in different cities and some couples don\'t have babies.
>>Nowadays, even married couples sometimes live in different cities, and some couples choose not to have children.
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