How has technology changed business? Do you think it\'s created more work or less?
학생이 쓴 원문
It\'s a time of the 4th industry revolution. IT and SMART technologies has changed our lifes simpler than before. For example now We don\'t have to clean the laundries by our hands, we just need to put them to the laundry machine. And we don\'t need to brush and wipe the floor. The automatic SMART vacuum cleaner clean the floor itself. Likewise the technology advance eases our burden.
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It\'s a time of the 4th industry revolution.
>> It\'s the time of the 4th industrial revolution.
IT and SMART technologies has changed our lifes simpler than before.
>> IT and SMART technologies have changed our lives simpler than before.
OR>> IT and SMART technologies have changed our lives making it easier than before.
For example now We don\'t have to clean the laundries by our hands, we just need to put them to the laundry machine.
>> For example, now we don\'t have to do laundry with our hands, we just need to put them in the laundry machine.
And we don\'t need to brush and wipe the floor.
>> And we don\'t need to sweep and wipe the floor.
The automatic SMART vacuum cleaner clean the floor itself.
>> The automatic SMART vacuum cleaner cleans the floor itself.
Likewise the technology advance eases our burden.
>> Likewise, advanced technology eases our burden.
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