How has the media affected society? Has TV made society better or worse? Discuss in 3 to 5 sentences
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Recently, almost people using smart phone for a work and SNS. This SNS affected society both better and worse. First of all, we can talk and conversation with this smart phone in real time. Otherwise, if some people disseminate wrong information, almost people didn\'t check that whether this information is correct or not. TV also disseminate a lot of information from news program, but we need to double check about this news information is correct or not. So i think that TV is not matter about mad society better or worse, just depend on checking ourselves.
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Hello, [이름]. Not bad for your first composition.^^ I appreciate that you took the time to make your homework. I know how busy and stressed you could be but I hope doing this homework is a helpful diversion from your everyday routine. Again, thank you and great job. Have a wonderful evening. Take it easy. ~ Teacher Jane c\",)
Recently, almost people using smart phone for a work and SNS.
>>> Recently, almost all people are using smartphones for work and SNS.
This SNS affected society both better and worse.
>>> These SNS affected society both better and worse.
First of all, we can talk and conversation with this smart phone in real time.
>>> First of all, we can talk and have conversations using smartphones in real-time.
Otherwise, if some people disseminate wrong information, almost people didn\'t check that whether this information is correct or not.
>>> Otherwise, if some people disseminate wrong information, most people would not check whether this information is correct or not.
TV also disseminate a lot of information from news program, but we need to double check about this news information is correct or not.
>>> The television also disseminates a lot of information from news programs but we need to double-check the news information if it is correct or not.
So i think that TV is not matter about mad society better or worse, just depend on checking ourselves.
>>> So I think it does not matter whether TV made society better or worse we just have to check ourselves.
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