How has the media affected society? Has TV made society better or worse?
학생이 쓴 원문
Media has bad influence especially to women.
All the women in media like TV and magazine have perfect appearance.
Because we are exposed to media all the time, many women obsess about their skin, hair and skinny body like stars in media and never can be satisfied with as they are.
But stars in media are perfectly managed to look beautiful which means those beauty is almost impossible in our natural living.
So I think that media have to show lives of ordinary women.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]. I appreciate you speaking your mind through this composition. It is very sad but that is the reality these days especially for girls. They feel they do not fit in the society they live in when they do not look perfect like the women they see on media. I hope the media portrays a different image for these girls that they do not need to live up to the standards of what society wants them to be. Have a good night and let\'s talk again tomorrow for our class. See you! ~ Teacher Jane c\",)
Media has bad influence especially to women.
>>> Media has a bad influence, especially on women.
All the women in media like TV and magazine have perfect appearance.
>>> All women on media like TV and magazines have perfect appearances.
Because we are exposed to media all the time, many women obsess about their skin, hair and skinny body like stars in media and never can be satisfied with as they are.
>>> Because we are exposed to media all the time, many women obsess about their skin, hair, and skinny body to be like the stars on media and they can never be satisfied with who they are.
But stars in media are perfectly managed to look beautiful which means those beauty is almost impossible in our natural living.
>>> But stars on media are perfectly managed to look beautiful which means their beauty is almost impossible to achieve in a natural way.
So I think that media have to show lives of ordinary women.
>>> So I think that the media has to show the lives of ordinary women.
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