How has your diet changed over your lifetime?

2021-09-13 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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When I was a student, I love to eat. I spent a lot of money to eat, unlike my friends who like to buy clothes and cosmetics. Specially, I loved all kinds of bread. When I started working, my diet changed a bit. Because I had enough money to buy anything. I ate a lot of noodles, ice cream, Tansuyuk, bread and cake etc. After giving birth to my first daughter, I was dissatisfied with my chubby body. So I was on a diet for almost a year. I ate very little bread and carbs. I became slim and very satisfied. After giving birth to my second child, I became chubby again, but I am not on a diet yet. I think I need to go on a diet again for my health.

강사 첨삭

Hi Jennifer! 
It\'s really normal for some women to gain weight after birth. 
You don\'t look fat, I think you are slim now. 

When I was a student, I love to eat.
>>> CORRECT!
I spent a lot of money to eat, unlike my friends who like to buy clothes and cosmetics.
>>> Unlike my friends who buy clothes and cosmetics, I spent a lot of money on eating.
Specially, I loved all kinds of bread.
>>> Especially, I loved all kinds of bread.
When I started working, my diet changed a bit.
>>> CORRECT! 
Because I had enough money to buy anything.
>>> CORRECT!
I ate a lot of noodles, ice cream, Tangsuyuk, bread and cake etc.
>>> CORRECT!
After giving birth to my first daughter, I was dissatisfied with my chubby body.
>>> CORRECT!
So I was on a diet for almost a year.
>>> CORRECT!
I ate very little bread and carbs.
>>> CORRECT!
I became slim and very satisfied.
>>> CORRECT!
After giving birth to my second child, I became chubby again, but I am not on a diet yet.
>>> CORRECT!
I think I need to go on a diet again for my health.
>>> CORRECT! 

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