How has your family background affected the way you see the world?
학생이 쓴 원문
My father was taxi driver when I was young. I was growing up in good care of parents. My father\'s salary was enough to get me education very well and we could buy something we needed. Some time ago, my father got a car accident as a result, he was admitted in the hospital for about a year to get treatment. Our family spent all the money we saved for his treatment. We had to move out small rent house after he discharged from a hospital. My father stressed the importance of saving anything such as electricity, money and so on. I could understand his instructions because I was too young to understand his deep thought. My parents allowed me to do anything I wanted to do even thought our family had difficulties in finance matters. My father also stressed the importance of being diligent. With these teaching from my parents, my view of life had changed to positive way and I realized that being diligent and positive is key values to have constructive life.
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Hi there Mr. [이름]. Thank you for answering your essay homework~! ^^ Have a good one!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
My father was taxi driver when I was young.>>> My father was a taxi driver when I was young.
I was growing up in good care of parents.
>>> I grew up with caring parents.
My father\'s salary was enough to get me education very well and we could buy something we needed.
>>> CORRECT
Some time ago, my father got a car accident as a result, he was admitted in the hospital for about a year to get treatment.
>>> CORRECT
Our family spent all the money we saved for his treatment.
>>> CORRECT
We had to move out small rent house after he discharged from a hospital.
>>> We had to move out from a small rented house after he got discharged from the hospital.
My father stressed the importance of saving anything such as electricity, money and so on.
>>> CORRECT
I could understand his instructions because I was too young to understand his deep thought.
>>> I couldn\'t understand his instructions because I was too young to understand his deep thought.
My parents allowed me to do anything I wanted to do even thought our family had difficulties in finance matters.
>>> My parents allowed me to do anything I wanted to do even though our family had difficulties financially.
My father also stressed the importance of being diligent.
>>> CORRECT
With these teachings from my parents, my view of life had changed to positive way and I realized that being diligent and positive are the key values to have a more constructive life.
>>> CORRECT
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