How has your favorite hobby [이름]nged your life or personality,.

2026-02-02 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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My hobby is collect the Lego, lego is [이름]nged my room.the many legos in the my room. And Lego is turn the my fun.

강사 첨삭

Hi Jimmy!

This is your first revised composition from last week\'s homework. You can see the corrected version below.  


Cheers,
Jean~~


                                        

                                                           How has your favorite hobby [이름]nged your life or personality?



My hobby is collect the Lego,
>>>  My hobby is collecting LEGO.
>>> OR: My hobby is building and collecting LEGO sets.

 lego is [이름]nged my room.
>>> LEGO has [이름]nged my room.
>>> OR: My room looks different because of my LEGO collection. 

The many legos in the my room.
>>> There are many Lego pieces in my room.

And Lego is turn the my fun.
>>> Playing with LEGO makes me happy. 
>>> OR: Playing with has become my favorite way to have fun.

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