How have your political views changed during your lifetime?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I have. When I was in twenties, I though that it should be no poor people in Korea. Everybody wanted to work hard and became wealthy through the right means. But, I was wrong. Some people want to do it. Many people are Jealous of wealthy people. They don\'t know how much effort was put in to be wealthy. Everybody wants to be wealthy, but only a few people put in the effort to achieve it. After knowing this, my political views changed.
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Great work, [이름]ny! Thank you for sharing your thoughts! See you in class.
Yes, I have.
-Teacher Angela
>> CORRECT
When I was in twenties, I though that it should be no poor people in Korea.
>> When I was in my twenties, I though that there should be no poor people in Korea.
Everybody wanted to work hard and became wealthy through the right means.
>> Everybody wants to work hard and become wealthy through the right means.
But, I was wrong. Some people want to do it. Many people are Jealous of wealthy people.
>> But I was wrong; some people do want to work hard and become wealthy through the right means. Many people are jealous of wealthy individuals.
They don\'t know how much effort was put in to be wealthy.
>> CORRECT
Everybody wants to be wealthy, but only a few people put in the effort to achieve it.
>> CORRECT
After knowing this, my political views changed.
>> CORRECT
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