How helpful are you to those people who are in need ?

2018-06-27 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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How helpful are you to those people who are in need ? When I was young, I often do a volunteer. I often went to a elementary school whcih is for disabled people. I was of help to the disabled. After volunteering, I always felt good because I help someone. But, as I grow order, I don't go there for volunteering.. Not human but now, I often do volunteer work for abandoned dogs. I love animals so I made up my mind to do volunteer work for abandoned dogs. I have never raised animals, so I help with simple tasks. I do as a walking with abandoned dogs. Some dogs have a very active personality, but most dogs are afraid of people. When I go walk with dogs, some dogs refuse to go walk. They are going back.. Not long ago, I knew that the puppy who went walk with me was adopted and I was really happy. I hope there aren't many abandoned animals. I hope all living creatures are happy.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Lily!

I also hope that those abandoned animals can be rescued , adopted and well taken care off by people. Let\'s spread love to one another. Happy hump day!

~Teacher Eunice


How helpful are you to those people who are in need ?
>>> Correct!
When I was young, I often do a volunteer.

>>> When I was young, I often do a volunteer work.

I often went to a elementary school whcih is for disabled people.

>>> I used to visit an elementary school for disabled people.

I was of help to the disabled.

>>> I was able to help disabled people before.
 After volunteering, I always felt good because I help someone.

>>> After volunteering, It always felt good because I helped someone out.  
But, as I grow order, I don\'t go there for volunteering.

>>> But, as I grow older, I don\'t go there for volunteering anymore. 
 Not human but now, I often do volunteer work for abandoned dogs.

>>> Now, I often do volunteer work for abandoned dogs.
 I love animals so I made up my mind to do volunteer work for abandoned dogs.

>>> Correct!

 I have never raised animals, so I help with simple tasks.

>>> I have never raised animals, so I help by doing simple tasks.
 I do as a walking with abandoned dogs.

>>> I go walking with abandoned dogs.

Some dogs have a very active personality, but most dogs are afraid of people.

>>> Correct!

When I go walk with dogs, some dogs refuse to go walk.

>>> When I go walking with dogs, some of them refuse to walk.

They are going back..

>>> They want to go back.
Not long ago, I knew that the puppy who went walk with me was adopted and I was really happy.

>>> Not long ago, when I knew that the puppy who used to walk with me was adopted, I was really happy.  

I hope there aren\'t many abandoned animals.

>>> Correct!

I hope all living creatures are happy.

>>> Correct!


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