How helpful are you to those people who are in need ?
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Hi there Lily!
I also hope that those abandoned animals can be rescued , adopted and well taken care off by people. Let\'s spread love to one another. Happy hump day!
~Teacher Eunice
How helpful are you to those people who are in need ?
>>> Correct!
When I was young, I often do a volunteer.
>>> When I was young, I often do a volunteer work.
I often went to a elementary school whcih is for disabled people.
>>> I used to visit an elementary school for disabled people.
I was of help to the disabled.
>>> I was able to help disabled people before.
After volunteering, I always felt good because I help someone.
>>> After volunteering, It always felt good because I helped someone out.
But, as I grow order, I don\'t go there for volunteering.
>>> But, as I grow older, I don\'t go there for volunteering anymore.
Not human but now, I often do volunteer work for abandoned dogs.
>>> Now, I often do volunteer work for abandoned dogs.
I love animals so I made up my mind to do volunteer work for abandoned dogs.
>>> Correct!
I have never raised animals, so I help with simple tasks.
>>> I have never raised animals, so I help by doing simple tasks.
I do as a walking with abandoned dogs.
>>> I go walking with abandoned dogs.
Some dogs have a very active personality, but most dogs are afraid of people.
>>> Correct!
When I go walk with dogs, some dogs refuse to go walk.
>>> When I go walking with dogs, some of them refuse to walk.
They are going back..
>>> They want to go back.
Not long ago, I knew that the puppy who went walk with me was adopted and I was really happy.
>>> Not long ago, when I knew that the puppy who used to walk with me was adopted, I was really happy.
I hope there aren\'t many abandoned animals.
>>> Correct!
I hope all living creatures are happy.
>>> Correct!
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