How I will change in the future
학생이 쓴 원문
Actually, I can\'t imagine how I will change in the future. As I grew up, my personalities has been changed a lot compared to when I was young. I think it is because of surroundings like friends, cities and so on. It is very natural to get used to our own lifestyles and of course, our lifestyles are changing depending on surroundings. I am still student and it is a very big reason for my current personalities but, after I get a job in a different city and make a new friend or coworker, my personalities would change then. Moreover, I think there will be a turning point in my life which is marriage. When I get married, I think my priority would be changed and my mindset also has to be changed. Anyway, I hope there will be good things in my forward life.
강사 첨삭
1. Actually, I can\'t imagine how I will change in the future.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Actually, I can\'t imagine how I will be different in the future.
2. As I grew up, my personalities has been changed a lot compared to when I was young.
>>As I was growing up, my personalities has changed a lot compared to when I was young.
3. I think it is because of surroundings like friends, cities and so on.
>>I think it is because of my surroundings like friends, cities and so on.
4. It is very natural to get used to our own lifestyles and of course, our lifestyles are changing depending on surroundings.
>>It is very natural to get used to our own lifestyles and of course, our lifestyles are changing depending on the kinds of surroundings we have.
5. I am still student and it is a very big reason for my current personalities but, after I get a job in a different city and make a new friend or coworker, my personalities would change then.
>>I am still a student and it is a very big reason for my current personalities but, after I get a job in a different city and make a new friend or coworker, my personalities would change then.
6. Moreover, I think there will be a turning point in my life which is marriage.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Also, I think there will be a turning point in my life which is marriage.
7. When I get married, I think my priority would be changed and my mindset also has to be changed.
>>When I get married, I think my priorities would be changed and my mindset also will have to be changed.
8. Anyway, I hope there will be good things in my forward life.
>>Anyway, I hope there will be good things in my life forward.
Very good.
- T. Melody ^^
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