How important are after-school activities to kids these days?
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I think it depends on the situation. In the case of Korean students, after-school activities are not really important. And they can\'t even do that because they have to go to their academy. But when it comes to my school(in Jakarta), I think it is important. Because my school really cares about socializing in after-school activities.
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I think it depends on the situation.
>> or: I\'d say, it\'s case by case.
In the case of Korean students, after-school activities are not really important.
>> or: Extracurricular activities are not given much importance by Korean students.
And they can\'t even do that because they have to go to their academy.
>> or: Besides, they don\'t have spare time for that since they have academies to attend.
But when it comes to my school(in Jakarta), I think it is important. Because my school really cares about socializing in after-school activities.
>> That said, the school where I go to in Jakarta deems it important because they pay special attention to socializing which can be done through such activities.
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