How important are family gatherings in your country?
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Family gatherings are getting less important in Korea.
Koreans used to have a strong bond and keep close relationships between family including relatives but nuclear family is becoming common, family bonding has been lessen.
In the past, ancesters rite was very important culture so that people take attending it for granted.
However nowadays, many people consider it\'s unecessary and some people even stop holing it that family gatherings become decrease naturally.
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Family gatherings are getting less important in Korea.
>> or: The importance of family gatherings in Korea has significantly decreased over the years.
Koreans used to have a strong bond and keep close relationships between family including relatives but nuclear family is becoming common, family bonding has been lessen.
>> Koreans used to have a strong bond and maintained close relationships between family members including relatives but nuclear family has become common, which resulted in the weakening of family bonding.
In the past, ancesters rite was very important culture so that people take attending it for granted.
>> In the past, ancestral rites were a very important culture that\'s why people didn\'t take it for granted.
However nowadays, many people consider it\'s unecessary and some people even stop holing it that family gatherings become decrease naturally.
>> However nowadays, many people consider attending such rites unnecessary and others even stop holding it that\'s why family gatherings have decreased naturally.
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