How important do you think education is?

2019-06-11 · 첨삭 강사 May

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Education is the most important ingredient to build person\'s values, personalities and beliefs. We must have a relationship with people to help each others. If people don\'t get proper education, they don\'t know how to make friends, how to interact with another and what is right or wrong attitude morally. Education teach us how to handle responsibility, help us realize our potential and allow us to learn the mistakes of those who lived before us, so that we don\'t repeat the same mistake. I have seen news about people who are not educated that have stolen passbook update machine instead of an ATM. If they were educated, they wouldn\'t have tried robbery. As we know like the example I have shown above, education build person\'s perspective.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! How are you? Thanks for your answers. Many people know how to value education.

There are really some who don\'t because of some factors. One of the factors why some people are not

educated is poverty. Governments provide free basic education but a lot of questions still arise.

Is it enough? Does it really help? or the people just don\'t have the initiative to help themselves?

See you tomorrow. ^^

~~Teacher May~~

Education is the most important ingredient to build person\'s values, personalities and beliefs.

>> CORRECT

We must have a relationship with people to help each others.

>> We must have a relationship with people to help each other.

If people don\'t get proper education, they don\'t know how to make friends, how to interact with another and what is right or wrong attitude morally.

>> If people don\'t get proper education, they don\'t know how to make friends, how to interact with one another and know what is right or wrong.

Education teach us how to handle responsibility, help us realize our potential and allow us to learn the mistakes of those who lived before us, so that we don\'t repeat the same mistake.

>> Education teaches us how to handle responsibilities, help us realize our potential and allow us to learn from mistakes of those who lived before us, so that we don\'t repeat the same mistake.

I have seen news about people who are not educated that have stolen passbook update machine instead of an ATM. If they were educated, they wouldn\'t have tried robbery.
As we know like the example I have shown above, education build person\'s perspective.

>> CORRECT

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