How important is dancing in your culture?
학생이 쓴 원문
Dancing is very important in Korean culture. In past, there was a dance called masked dance. When there was corruption in my country, citizens wore mask and dance. During the dancing, people criticized the country and expressed their thought.
강사 첨삭
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Dancing is very important in Korean culture.
In past, there was a dance called masked dance.
>> correct
When there was corruption in my country, citizens wore mask and dance.
>> At that time, our leaders or officials oppressed the people and they were corrupt so the citizens wore masks and danced.
During the dancing, people criticized the country and expressed their thought.
>> While dancing, people criticized the country and expressed their thoughts.
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