How important is it for you to vote? Which Presidential candidate do you like?

2017-04-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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It is important for me to vote for the candidates. To have a right to protest theirs policies, it is essential to vote for them. first of all, I put emphasis on thiers alternative or suggestion for the future. In korea, some of politicians have been received support by bla[이름]g other politicians behaivors. but I just ask them to introduce what they do for the future. we`ve been already known any politicians faults. Instead of negative and religion strategies, I just want them to suggest feasible suggestions for the future. thesdays they argued with the other one in the TV show. they slandered each other out of argue subject. Eventhough korea faced serious problems like economic, corruption and national security, they are expressing theirs emotion just to obtain the support. before voting them, I will prefer to someone who has a suggestion for the korea future.

강사 첨삭

Hello Oh,

I would always appreciate the kindness and optimism you\'ve shown. In addition, you always acknowledge and listen to
corrections given to you. Keep doing that because it would help you a lot to improve faster.

Thank you for your homework.

Always Smile!!!

T. Jeny

It is important for me to vote for the candidates.

>>correct

To have a right to protest theirs policies, it is essential to vote for them.

>>I have a right to protest their policies, it is essential to vote for them.
first of all, I put emphasis on thiers alternative or suggestion for the future.

>>First of all, I put emphasis on their alternative suggestions for the future.
In korea, some of politicians have been received support by bla[이름]g other politicians behaivors.

>>In Korea, some politicians have been receiving support by bla[이름]g other politicians behavior.

but I just ask them to introduce what they do for the future.

>>But I just ask them to introduce what they do for the future.

we`ve been already known any politicians faults.

>>We are already aware of their faults.

Instead of negative and religion strategies, I just want them to suggest feasible suggestions for the future.

>>Instead of negative and religious strategies, I want them to suggest feasible suggestions for the future.
thesdays they argued with the other one in the TV show.

>>These days, they argue with one another in the TV show.
they slandered each other out of argue subject.

>>They slander each other over a subject.

Eventhough korea faced serious problems like economic, corruption and national security, they are expressing theirs emotion just to obtain the support.

>>Even though Korea is facing serious problems like economic, corruption and national security, they are expressing their emotions just to obtain support.
before voting them, I will prefer to someone who has a suggestion for the korea future

>>Before voting them, I prefer someone who has a suggestion about Korea\'s future.

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