How important is our teeth?
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We say that people who have three health of eyes, teeth, and backbone are lucky as a joke. That are important parts of ours as we say that. Especially, managing teeth is very important because it is related to intake nutrients through foods.
First, we can’t live without teeth. We should get nutrients through foods because we can’t produce nutrients by ourselves like plants. Because of this reason, we should maintain health of teeth until we die.
Also, teeth can’t return again to original state if it is worse. Any alternative like a implant have a side effect. So, it is very important to manage well before it get wrong.
Finally, curing teeth needs a lot of money. I think dental treatment is one of the most expensive cure in general treatment. If we get a scaling which is simple treatment, we spent over 10,000 won although it is covered by insurance. So, managing teeth usually is more economical activity.
Thus, we should manage our teeth well.
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Thank you Se [이름]!
~Lucy
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That are important parts of ours as we say that.
>>CORRECT!
Especially, managing teeth is very important because it is related to intake nutrients through foods.
>>CORRECT!
First, we can’t live without teeth.
>>CORRECT!
First, we can’t live without teeth.
>>CORRECT!
We should get nutrients through foods because we can’t produce nutrients by ourselves like plants.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this reason, we should maintain health of teeth until we die.
>>CORRECT!
Also, teeth can’t return again to original state if it is worse.
>>CORRECT!
Also, teeth can’t return again to original state if it is worse.
>>CORRECT!
Any alternative like a implant have a side effect.
>>Any alternative like an implant have a side effect.
So, it is very important to manage well before it get wrong.
>>So, it is very important to manage well before it gets wrong.
Finally, curing teeth needs a lot of money.
>>So, it is very important to manage well before it gets wrong.
Finally, curing teeth needs a lot of money.
>>CORRECT!
I think dental treatment is one of the most expensive cure in general treatment.
>>CORRECT!
If we get a scaling which is simple treatment, we spent over 10,000 won although it is covered by insurance.
>>CORRECT!
So, managing teeth usually is more economical activity.
>>CORRECT!
Thus, we should manage our teeth well.
>>CORRECT!
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