How important is sleep?

2020-01-08 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

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if we can see how much important is sleep. it is definitely top like VIP Human body is very sensitive, and sleep is big part of our life If we calculate the average amount of sleep per day at 8 hours, you spend total 30 years of sleeping. That is almost spend one-third of our total life Can you believe it? human whole life is 100 year. I think it is such a shame. Because we can not cut down sleep, we have to sleep at least 30 minute. And if we cut down sleep, our condition will get worse than before yesterday You are eyes become red, your skin get more dry, you can\'t concentrate everything anymore, Your level of immunity get down, and to easy get a cold or something disease. That much sleep is very important to our living P.S I looked up what you said that Russian sleep experiment. And i almost fainted because of that image. There are too many scary image so i slept with grab my doll yesterday :D

강사 첨삭

Thank you so much for doing your homework for today. Great composition!

I definitely agree with your points.

I\'m looking forward to our next class! Keep up the good work.

~Teacher Eve.

if we can see how much important is sleep. it is definitely top like VIP

>> If we can see how important sleep is, we will be like VIPs.
 Human body is very sensitive, and sleep is big part of our life

>> Our human body is very sensitive and sleep is big part of our life.
 If we calculate the average amount of sleep per day at 8 hours, you spend total 30 years of sleeping.

>>If we calculate the average amount of sleep per day in 8 hours, we will spend a total of 30 years of sleeping.
 That is almost spend one-third of our total life

>>Correct!
 Can you believe it? human whole life is 100 year.

>> Can you believe it? Human\'s whole life is 100 years.
 I think it is such a shame.

>> Correct!
 Because we can not cut down sleep, we have to sleep at least 30 minute.

>>  Because we can not cut down on sleep, we have to sleep at least 30 minutes.
 And if we cut down sleep, our condition will get worse than before yesterday

>> And if we cut down our sleep, our condition will get worse than yesterday.
 You are eyes become red, your skin get more dry, you can\'t concentrate everything anymore,

>>  Your eyes becomes red, your skin get drier, you can\'t concentrate anymore.
 Your level of immunity get down, and to easy get a cold or something disease.

>> Your level of immunity gets down, and it\'s too easy to get a cold or some disease.
 That much sleep is very important to our living

>> That\'s why sleep is very important to our life.

 P.S
I looked up what you said that Russian sleep experiment.

>> Correct!
 And i almost fainted because of that image.

>> And i almost fainted because of the image.
 There are too many scary image so i slept with grab my doll yesterday :D

>> There are many scary images so I slept with my doll yesterday

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