How is beauty defined in your culture?
학생이 쓴 원문
Nowadays Korean beauty standards prioritize a slim figure, small face, v-shaped jaw, pale skin, straight eyebrows, larger eyes. Beauty standards for the eyes include aegyo-sal, which is a term used in Korea referring to the small fatty deposits underneath the eyes that are said to give a person a more youthful appearance.
And many Korean girls get double eyelid surgery after Korean SAT as a gift for their hardworking for a long time because double eyelid makes their eyes look larger. These Korean beauty standards have been influenced largely by celebrities including actresses and K-pop stars. The physical appearance of K-pop idols has greatly impacted the beauty standards among young Koreans.
However, I doubt it is a true Korean beauty standard that contemporary Koreans agree with. I suspect it is the beauty standard that Korean youngsters are forced to follow by mass media or big capitalists. I want to define Korean beauty in an inner aspect rather than an outer appearance.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Steve! Thank you so much for taking the time to do your homework. However, when you\'re going to use the exact words from any source, surround them with quotation marks.
- Debbie
>> Nowadays, Korean beauty standards prioritize a slim figure, small face, v-shaped jaw, pale skin, straight eyebrows, and larger eyes.
Beauty standards for the eyes include aegyo-sal, which is a term used in Korea referring to the small fatty deposits underneath the eyes that are said to give a person a more youthful appearance.
>> Beauty standards for eyes include \"aegyo-sal,\" a term used in Korea referring to the small fatty deposits underneath the eyes that give a person a more youthful appearance.
And many Korean girls get double eyelid surgery after Korean SAT as a gift for their hardworking for a long time because double eyelid makes their eyes look larger.
>> Moreover, many Korean girls get double eyelid surgery after Korean SAT as a gift for their hard work. Double eyelids make their eyes look larger.
These Korean beauty standards have been influenced largely by celebrities including actresses and K-pop stars.
>> These Korean beauty standards have been influenced largely by celebrities, including actresses and K-pop stars.
The physical appearance of K-pop idols has greatly impacted the beauty standards among young Koreans.
>> This is a good sentence.
However, I doubt it is a true Korean beauty standard that contemporary Koreans agree with.
However, I doubt it is a true Korean beauty standard that contemporary Koreans agree with.
>> However, I doubt it is the real Korean beauty standard that contemporary Koreans agree with.
I suspect it is the beauty standard that Korean youngsters are forced to follow by mass media or big capitalists.
>> I suspect it is the beauty standard that mass media and big capitalists enforce on Korean youngsters.
I want to define Korean beauty in an inner aspect rather than an outer appearance.
>> I want to define Korean beauty in terms of character rather than outer appearance.
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