How is beauty defined in your society?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that beauty is a combination of inner and outer beauty.
But I feel sorry since many Koreans only value outer beauty.
People tell that beauty and youth are the biggest power especially for women and we can see many cosmetic and plastic surgery advertisements easily everywhere in Korea.
But beauty and youth are temporary and these aren\'t a real power as they are given by others who estimate our appearance.
This kind of tendency make people be obsessed with their appearance and also restrict their actions.
So I think lookism in Korea must disappear.
강사 첨삭
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I think that beauty is a combination of inner and outer beauty.
>>> CORRECT =)
But I feel sorry since many Koreans only value outer beauty.
>>> CORRECT =)
People tell that beauty and youth are the biggest power especially for women and we can see many cosmetic and plastic surgery advertisements easily everywhere in Korea.
>>> People say that beauty and youth are the biggest power especially for women and we can see many cosmetic and plastic surgery advertisements easily everywhere in Korea.
But beauty and youth are temporary and these aren\'t a real power as they are given by others who estimate our appearance.
>>> CORRECT =)
This kind of tendency make people be obsessed with their appearance and also restrict their actions.
>>> This kind of tendency makes people obsessed with their appearance and also restrict their actions.
So I think lookism in Korea must disappear.
>>> CORRECT =)
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