How is cleanliness in your parks maintained?

2018-08-28 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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As I know, government in Korea hire many people for cleaning pubic places. The cleaner perform their duties very well and I can see how clean the public parks are. However, it became dirty very quickly than we could expect. The basic manner and habit of people in our country is the major problem. People throw away trash to any place without guilty, even though our country has imposed fine when people put the trash on the road. I am not sure how many employee are working for cleaning in our nation and I thought the number of worker was enough for cleaning. But I was shocked when I saw the cleaning system in UAE, every toilet have a person for cleaning and they clean it frequently. It seems like that cleaners must stay in toilet and clean all facilities once somebody use it. I thought it was not right because workers looked like they did not get respected for human right. I can not say what is right but I can say that Koreans must change their bad habit and have to think about the environment pollution.

강사 첨삭

I think your public national parks are popular among people, Sir [이름]!

It\'s the go to destination for tourists, and local people who want to be reunited with nature. Therefore, the park cleaners are really helpful to have these parks well-maintained, and highly functional. Thank you for sharing this piece with me, see you!

~Teacher Eunice


As I know, government in Korea hire many people for cleaning pubic places.

>>> As I know, the government in Korea hires many people for cleaning pubic places.

The cleaner perform their duties very well and I can see how clean the public parks are.

>>> The cleaners perform their duties very well, and I can see how clean the public parks are.

However, it became dirty very quickly than we could expect.

>>> Correct!

The basic manner and habit of people in our country is the major problem.
>>>
The basic manner, and habit of people in our country is the major problem. 

People throw away trash to any place without guilty, even though our country has imposed fine when people put the trash on the road.

>>> People throw away trash to any places without guilt, even though our country has imposed fine when people put the trash on the road.

I am not sure how many employee are working for cleaning in our nation and I thought the number of worker was enough for cleaning. 

>>> I am not sure how many employees are working for cleaning our nation, and I think the number of workers are enough for cleaning. 

But I was shocked when I saw the cleaning system in UAE, every toilet have a person for cleaning and they clean it frequently.

>>> But I was shocked when I saw the cleaning system in the UAE, every toilet has a person for cleaning, and they clean it frequently.

It seems like that cleaners must stay in toilet and clean all facilities once somebody use it. 

>>> It seems like those  cleaners must stay in the toilet, and clean all the facilities once somebody uses it. 

I thought it was not right because workers looked like they did not get respected for human right.

>>> I thought it was not right because the workers looked like they weren\'t got respected for human rights.

>>> OR: I thought it wasn\'t right because it looked like the human rights of workers have been violated.

I can not say what is right but I can say that Koreans must change their bad habit and have to think about the environment pollution.

>>> I can not say what is right, but I can say that Koreans must change their bad habit, and have to think about the environmental pollution.


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