How is important is beauty in your daily life?
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was young in twenties, I thought beauty of appearance and decorating were more important than anything else. However as I get older in my thirties and forties, I have realized that inner beauty and pleasure make a happy life.
강사 첨삭
1. When I was young in twenties, I thought beauty of appearance and decorating were more important than anything else.
>>When I was in my twenties, I thought beauty and decorating were more important than anything else.
2. However as I get older in my thirties and forties, I have realized that inner beauty and pleasure make a happy life.
>>CORRECT
OR>>However as I get older in my thirties and forties, I have reckoned that inner beauty and pleasure make a happy life.
Good thought.
-T. Melody ^^
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