How is social media changing parent and child relationships?

2019-10-08 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Most young people use social medal apps kind of Instagram, Facebook at all times. So they don\'t usually talk to their parents a lot even if they are at home together. I think it makes them care about only their followers as time goes by.

강사 첨삭

Most young people use social medal apps kind of Instagram, Facebook at all times. 

>> Most young people use social medal apps like Instagram or Facebook all the time.

So they don\'t usually talk to their parents a lot even if they are at home together.

>> Correct

or

>>> So, they don\'t usually talk to their parents often even if they are at home.

I think it makes them care about only their followers as time goes by.

>> I think, this makes them care more about their followers as time goes by.

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