How is the justice system in your country?

2019-10-18 · 첨삭 강사 Joylin

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Actually, I don\'t know my country\'s justice system accurately. I know that we don\'t punish severely to the teenagers. I want to change this policy because there are a lot of crimes in teenagers. If there is a strong punishment, I think the crime rate will be decreased.

강사 첨삭

Hello, there!
Here are the corrections.
Actually, I don\'t know my country\'s justice system accurately.
>>Actually, I don\'t know about my country\'s justice system accurately.
I know that we don\'t punish severely to the teenagers.
>> I know that we don\'t punish teenagers severely.
I want to change this policy because there are a lot of crimes in teenagers.
>>Correct!
If there is a strong punishment, I think the crime rate will be decreased.
>>Correct!

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