How much do you love perfume? Do you wear it on a daily basis?

2019-02-11 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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I would have a problem on my nose, if I smelled strong perfume. This is because of rhinitis that I have been suffering since I was in middle school. I have never wear a perfume in my life, but I used to love buying it for giving it to my friends. Perfume is one of the best gifts we purchased and everybody would like to get it. I feel a little bit depressed when I realized that I could not use perfume on my body. I have had a problem of it when I was in the UAE. The local people in the UAE love wearing perfume, and we can easily see the places which sell perfume. So, I was suffering rhinitis whenever I visited mall in the city because I should pass the perfume stores on my way. I don\'t know exactly why local people love to wear perfume. I guess that they are living in the hottest place and easily get in a sweat. They might want to hide they smell by wearing perfume.

강사 첨삭

Hello Mr. [이름],

Thank you for your ideas in today’s homework!

Have a nice Monday!

Teacher ELLY.

How much do you love perfume? Do you wear it on a daily basis?

I would have a problem on my nose, if I smelled strong perfume.

>>I would have a problem on my nose, if I smelled a strong perfume.

This is because of rhinitis that I have been suffering since I was in middle school.

>>This is because of the rhinitis that I have been suffering since I was in middle school.

I have never wear a perfume in my life, but I used to love buying it for giving it to my friends.

>>I have never worn a perfume in my life, but I used to love buying it for my friends.

Perfume is one of the best gifts we purchased and everybody would like to get it.

>>Perfume is one of the best gifts we can purchase and everybody would like to get one.

I feel a little bit depressed when I realized that I could not use perfume on my body.

CORRECT!

or>>I feel a wee bit saddened when I came to know that I could never use a perfume.

I have had a problem of it when I was in the UAE.

>>I have had a problem with it when I was in the UAE.

The local people in the UAE love wearing perfume, and we can easily see the places which sell perfume.

>>The local people in the UAE love wearing perfumes, and we can easily find the places which sell perfumes.

So, I was suffering rhinitis whenever I visited mall in the city because I should pass the perfume stores on my way.

>>So, I used to suffer from rhinitis whenever I visited the mall in the city because I had to pass the perfume stores on my way home or to work.

I don\'t know exactly why local people love to wear perfume.

>>I don\'t know exactly why the local people love to wear perfumes.

I guess that they are living in the hottest place and easily get in a sweat.

>>I guess they are living in the hottest place in the world so they easily sweat.

They might want to hide they smell by wearing perfume.

>>They might want to hide their smell by wearing a perfume.

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