How much South Korea diversify its economy nowadays?
학생이 쓴 원문
I feel like that we are just focus on IT or Manufacturing industry too much nowadays.
I consider that we need to diversify about the art or service industry also.
강사 첨삭
Hello Benjamin!
I must agree that a country needs to be well-rounded. Difficult as it is, taking steps to slowly diversify means a sustainable future for your countrymen.
Perhaps you could also try another sort of business when your company has grown stronger and bigger.
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-T. Donna =)
I feel like that we are just focus on IT or Manufacturing industry too much nowadays.
>> I feel like we are just focused on IT or manufacturing industry too much nowadays.
I consider that we need to diversify about the art or service industry also.
>> I consider that we need to diversify with the art or service industry also.
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