How much time should be spent on making yourself look better each day? What do you usually do?

2018-10-02 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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I like to tell you about making me look better every single day. First of all, I usually go to a fitness center in order to workouts to stay healthy. The fitness center is located inside my company. So, I go there whenever I have a time after I finished my assignment for work. When I go there, I typically do running on the treadmill machin about one and half hours till sweaty a lot. You know, it makes me feel better and get rid of my stress after running. It help me to stay mental health as well. Another thing is studying speak English for improve to speaking ability. As you know, I always study English with you and also self-study alone whenever I have a time on the weekend. I really want to speaking English very well like local people as well as you. If I speak English absolutely well like you, I will have to a chance to work in overseas branches. That's about it. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Tiger!

Thank you so much for taking the time to answer your homework ^^

I really appreciate it.

I hope you are having a wonderful evening ^^

Enjoy the holiday tomorrow ♥


I like to tell you about making me look better every single day.

>> I like to tell you about how I make myself look better every single day.


First of all, I usually go to a fitness center in order to workouts to stay healthy.

>> First of all, I usually go to a fitness center in order to do my workout and stay healthy.


The fitness center is located inside my company.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: The fitness center is located in my office building.


So, I go there whenever I have a time after I finished my assignment for work.

>> So, I go there whenever I have the time after finishing my work assignment.


When I go there, I typically do running on the treadmill machin about one and half hours till sweaty a lot.

>> I usually use the treadmill for an hour and a half or until I seat a lot.


You know, it makes me feel better and get rid of my stress after running.

>> You know, it makes me feel better and it helps me get rid of my stress.

>> OR: Running makes me feel better and it helps me get rid of my stress.


It help me to stay mental health as well.

>> It strengthens my mental health.

>> OR: It helps me stay mentally healthy.


Another thing is studying speak English for improve to speaking ability.

>> I also study English to improve my speaking skills.

>> OR: I also study English to improve my speaking ability.


As you know, I always study English with you and also self-study alone whenever I have a time on the weekend.

>> As you know, I always study with you and I also self-study whenever I have the time on the weekend.

>> OR: As you know, I always study with you and I also study alone whenever I have the time on the weekend.


I really want to speaking English very well like local people as well as you.

>> I really want to speak fluent English like the Native speakers


If I speak English absolutely well like you, I will have to a chance to work in overseas branches.

>> If I speak English well, I will have the chance to work in out branches overseas.


That\'s about it.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: That\'s it.


Thank you.

>> CORRECT

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