How necessary is college/university education?
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t think that every student has to enter college or university after graduating from high school. However, it is sadly true that our society requires university diploma if he or she wants to work to earn money. It is understandable that companies want to hire those with diploma more than who doesn\'t not. That\'s because university graduates have deeper knowledge and information than who haven\'t gone to university. So, considering this social atmosphere, I would say that college education is necessary in a way. In addition, students can study any great depth of knowledge as well as learn valuable things. They can experience indirectly social life and learn deeply what they are interested in. These experiences can be highly helpful for students when they want to look for job or land a job. To summarize, I don\'t think that college education is positively necessary for every student. But, I would say that this education can lead students to broaden their horizon and land a job.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름] [이름]. Thank you for this. I agree, it\'s not for everybody. In other words, college/university education does not necessarily guarantee a good future, but it can help provide a better opportunity.
- T. Beth
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I don\'t think that every student has to enter college or university after graduating from high school. >>> correct
However, it is sadly true that our society requires university diploma if he or she wants to work to earn money.
>>> However, it is a sad truth that our society requires a university diploma if he or she wants to work to earn money.
It is understandable that companies want to hire those with diploma more than who doesn\'t not.
>>> It is understandable that companies want to hire those with diploma more than those who do not.
That\'s because university graduates have deeper knowledge and information than who haven\'t gone to university.
>>> That\'s because university graduates have deeper knowledge and information than those who haven\'t gone to university.
So, considering this social atmosphere, I would say that college education is necessary in a way.
>>> correct
In addition, students can study any great depth of knowledge as well as learn valuable things.
>>> correct
They can experience indirectly social life and learn deeply what they are interested in.
>>> correct
These experiences can be highly helpful for students when they want to look for job or land a job.
>>> correct
To summarize, I don\'t think that college education is positively necessary for every student.
>>> correct
But, I would say that this education can lead students to broaden their horizon and land a job.
>>> correct
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