How nutritious is bread? What is your favorite spread to put on bread?

2023-10-11 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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Bread is high calories in carbohydrates. It is a important nutrient to survive like rice, But it need to keep the balance of nutrients such as protein,fat,minerals I eat two times meals with rice ,or bread every day. sometimes, I like chicken sandwich and cheese bagel.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] [이름]!
Thank you for explaining your examples well.
It makes it that much easier to understand.
The writing was really smooth today.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Bread is high calories in carbohydrates.
>> Bread is high in calories and carbohydrates.
It is a important nutrient to survive like rice,
>> It is an important nutrient that we need to survive like the nutrients we can get from rice.
But it need to keep the balance of nutrients such as protein,fat,minerals
>> However, we need to keep the balance of nutrients in our body such as protein, fats, minerals.
I eat two times meals with rice ,or bread every day.
>> I eat two meals with rice or bread every day.
sometimes, I like chicken sandwich and cheese bagel.
>> Sometimes, I like chicken sandwich and cheese bagel.

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