How serious is bullying in your country?
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Since 90’s we have had serious problems on bullying at school. Some students were beaten by their class mates or suicided themselves because of bullying. At the moment of mid 90’s, there were released several k-pop songs which is about how serious bullying at school happened. Nowadays, it has become not only a school problem but also a social problem.
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~Lucy
Since 90’s we have had serious problems on bullying at school.
>>Since 90’s we have had serious problems of bullying at school.
Some students were beaten by their class mates or suicided themselves because of bullying.
>>Some students were beaten by their classmates or committed suicide because of bullying.
At the moment of mid 90’s, there were released several k-pop songs which is about how serious bullying at school happened.
>> At the moment of mid 90’s, there were several k-pop songs released which is about how serious bullying at school is.
Nowadays, it has become not only a school problem but also a social problem.
>>CORRECT!
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