how the sun effect both positively and negatively to humans.
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acting as a significant source for Vitamin D synthesis. (essential for bone health) and mood regulation. and posing significant risks like skin cancer and premature aging through Ultra violet radiation. And also Causes sunburn, immune system suppression.
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How the sun affects both positively and negatively.
acting as a significant source for Vitamin D synthesis. (essential for bone health) and mood regulation. and posing significant risks like skin cancer
and premature aging through Ultra violet radiation. And also Causes sunburn, immune system suppression.
>>> Sunlight acts as a significant source for Vitamin D synthesis, which is essential for bone health and mood regulation. However, it also poses serious risks such as skin cancer and premature aging due to ultraviolet radiation, and it can cause sunburn and immune system suppression.
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