How to avoid a bird flu?

2014-02-06 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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In order for us to avoid some illnesses such as bird flu virus, we should wash our hands using hot water, soap or sanitizers as frequently as possible especially when we return home. It is the easiest and the most effective way to wash our hands to prevent us from being infected by contagious diseases. In addition, we should keep our body in good condition. It will keep our immune system strong and help us fight off infection and recover more quickly if we fall ill. We are vulnerable to virus when we are weak. It is also important and essential for us to eat a good diet, get enough sleep, and exercise regularly to keep healthy. When traveling, we need to avoid rural areas, farms, and markets that have experienced the bird flu outbreaks. We should avoid cross-contamination when cooking with raw poultry or cooking eggs. We also need to ensure the chicken is cooked until juices run clear.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]! Thank you so much for sending this in.^^ I know that you are healthy because you are conscious about your health. I hope that a lot of people know these things in order for them to avoid some diseases. You did a marvelous job today! See you tomorrow!Teacher Nina   In order for us to avoid some illnesses such as bird flu virus, we should wash our hands using hot water, soap or sanitizers as frequently as possible especially when we return home. >> Correct! >> OR: In order for us to avoid some illnesses such as bird flu virus, we should wash our hands using hot water, soap or sanitizers as frequently as possible especially when we arrive home. It is the easiest and the most effective way to wash our hands to prevent us from being infected by contagious diseases. >> It is the easiest and the most effective way to prevent us from being infected with contagious diseases. In addition, we should keep our body in good condition. >> Correct! It will keep our immune system strong and help us fight off infection and recover more quickly if we fall ill. >> Correct! >> OR: It will keep our immune system strong, help us fight off infection and recover more quickly if we get sick. We are vulnerable to virus when we are weak. >> Correct! It is also important and essential for us to eat a good diet, get enough sleep, and exercise regularly to keep healthy. >> Did you mean: It is also important and essential for us to eat a well balanced diet, get enough sleep, and exercise regularly to be healthy. When traveling, we need to avoid rural areas, farms, and markets that have experienced the bird flu outbreaks. >> Did you mean: When traveling, we need to avoid rural areas, farms, and markets that had bird flu outbreaks. We should avoid cross-contamination when cooking with raw poultry or cooking eggs. >> Correct! We also need to ensure the chicken is cooked until juices run clear. >> We also need to ensure taht the chicken is cooked well until juice is clear.

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