How to deal with stress

2020-06-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

학생이 쓴 원문

The positive ways It`s better not to be alone if possible. Which make them feel more depressed It`s much better to go out and change the environment. I think it would be nice if someone could stay with them and go out with them. The negative ways Some blame themselves or blame others Or some people use violence. As a result. they will spoil themselves. The answer is not to blame or use violence, It is not good for mental health.

강사 첨삭

Hi Mrs. [Name]! Thank you for doing your homework. A job well done. Keep up the good work. See you later in class.

Here are your corrections:

The positive ways:

It`s better not to be alone if possible.
>> CORRECT

Which make them feel more depressed
>> Being alone make them feel more depressed.

It`s much better to go out and change the environment.
>> CORRECT

I think it would be nice if someone could stay with them and go out with them.
>>CORRECT


The negative ways:

Some blame themselves or blame others
Or some people use violence.
>> Some people blame themselves or blame others while some use violence.

As a result. they will spoil themselves.
>> CORRECT

The answer is not to blame or use violence, It is not good for mental health.
>> Blame and violence are not the answer because it will not be good for the mental health.

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