How to deal with the losses universities made.
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It turned out that many universities got huge lossses at the stock market. How do we see this situation. First of all, the assets they have don't belong to them even though, they are private schoole. They got subsidies from goverment and the assets basically are gathered by students. Meanwhile, it is definately right that they should find right ways they can increase the assest. Given that the stock market has been doing very well thesedays, it is clear they didn't invest with enough knowledge or information or took too much risk. Considering the asset is pulic, the ministry of education needs to supervise or set a guide for them in terms of investing.
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How to deal with the losses universities made.
>>>How to deal with the universities’ loss.
It turned out that many universities got huge lossses at the stock market.
>>>It turned out that a lot of universities got an unwanted loss in the stock market.
How do we see this situation.
>>>How did we come to know about this situation?
First of all, the assets they have don't belong to them even though, they are private schoole.
>>>First of all, the assets they are gaining don’t belong to them, may it be from the private or public universities.
They got subsidies from goverment and the assets basically are gathered by students.
>>>They are getting subsidies from the government and the assets are basically from the students’.
Meanwhile, it is definately right that they should find right ways they can increase the assest.
>>>Therefore, it is indeed right on their part to think and find ways on how they can increase the so-called “asset”.
Given that the stock market has been doing very well thesedays, it is clear they didn't invest with enough knowledge or information or took too much risk.
>>>I think that the stock market is doing better these days so maybe it’s time for them to invest knowledgeably and wisely before taking risks.
Considering the asset is pulic, the ministry of education needs to supervise or set a guide for them in terms of investing.
>>>Considering that the asset is public, the ministry of education is responsible in setting a good plan for investing.
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